Just a couple of thoughts... It does need more white space on the page, or people won't bother reading it. You want to make it easy for people to skim over it. Bullet points are a great way to do that. Even indenting paragraphs helps. You could also work on varying the sentence structure a bit from one to the next, and look out for redundancies (e.g. "short notice").
It can be a great idea to mix things up from time to time - and re-evaluating ourselves, even profiles, can make a difference. Hope this helps! |
